glistens my shivering
undone soul my
words seamless glistens.
heart my cold glistens –
heart won’t find!
words words words cannot –
I find my
shivering, seamless, undone tongue
words in heart
Writing practice based on Natalie Goldberg’s ‘Syntax’ exercise (Writing Down the Bones, Shambala, 2005).
‘Our language is usually locked into a sentence syntax of subject/verb/direct-object. There is a subject acting on an object. “I see the dog” – with this sentence structure, “I” is the centre of the universe. We forget in our language structure that while “I” looks at “the dog”, “the dog” is simultaneously looking at us. It is interesting to note that in the Japanese language the sentence would say, “I dog seeing.” There is an exchange or interaction rather than a subject acting on an object.
“We think in sentences, and the way we think is the way we see. If we think in the structure subject/verb/direct-object, then that is how we form our world. By cracking open that syntax, we release energy and are able to see the world afresh and from a new angle.” (p68)